…. Shea hung up the phone; she couldn’t believe what was happening. Her friends noticed that she was worried about something, but she denied it, she said that she was only tired and needed some rest. That night, she had to study for the exam with the copy of it; her room would be empty because her roommate was going to a party. The next day in the classroom, all the students were nervous, especially Shea. When Dr. Stark entered the classroom, she said that there was one reason to leave the office opened where the test was. In that moment, Shea was confused. Dr. Stark continued talking and said that she put a camera on the room; and that after the test she would see that videotape. Shea knew that if Dr. Stark saw that video, she would be in trouble for a long time.
After taking the exam, Shea was feeling bad. She decided to tell Dr. Stark everything, so she went to her office to talk to her. When she arrived there, the door was opened, and Dr. Stark was on the floor, lying unconscious and bleeding. And the paperweight (where Shea left some blood spots) wasn’t there. Immediately, Shea called the emergency services but she didn’t give them her name. After a few minutes, some people arrived and took Mathilde Stark to the hospital. When Shea went to her room, she noticed that Tandy wasn´t there, and some seconds later, the telephone started ringing. It was the whisperer again, and he told her that he had taken the video and the paperweight. The whisperer also said that he would give her the video but she had to wait for a note in her mailbox.
For some days, Shea was impatient, and one day, there was a white notebook paper in her mailbox that was from the whispered. In the letter he said that he would meet her at the woods behind Nightmare Hall. Shea was scared, but she decided to go there. That night, she went at midnight to the place where the whisperer told her to be. She could hear his voice, but she couldn’t see him. He just explained what Shea had to do in order to get that videotape. It was a horrible thing what Shea had to do: she had to go to the lab where one of her friends worked, take a snake named Mariah, put it on a bag, take it to the room 620 and leave it inside the room!! Shea couldn’t imagine what was happening, but she had to do it if she wanted to get that videotape. So the next night she figured out the entire plan. But when she was leaving the building, she heard a scream coming from room 620 and everyone woke up. One of the girls who slept in that room, Bethany, had heart problems and had to be taken to the hospital. Shea helped there and then returned to her room. When she entered, the whisperer called her, but she was so mad that she hung up the phone. Some days later, Shea received a bag that contained something rectangular. She thought that it would be the videotape and when she opened it, she saw it. It was finally on her hands! That afternoon she went to see the video, but when she played it, she could only watch a Tom & Jerry cartoon. Shea couldn’t believe that. All what she had done for nothing?
Suddenly, she heard a voice, it was the whisperer. He was really mad and that was the reason of changing the videos. But he told Shea to do another thing so she could get the video, but this time it was a worse thing: she had to cut Tandy’s hair! She couldn’t do that. He told her that he had to go, but she had to do that in order to get the correct videotape. That night she went back to her room and saw Tandy sleeping.
Next day, Shea woke up and saw something strange: Tandy’s hair was on the floor. She didn’t know what to do, and when Tandy woke up, she screamed and then Dinah appeared. Tandy explained what had happened to her. Fortunately, Dinah could help her to have a nice hairstyle. That afternoon, while Shea was walking, someone took her neck with his hands, it was the whisperer, he told her that if she wanted the videotape, she had to look for it, and then he put something on her bag and left her. Shea looked into her bag and saw a cassette; she went to listen to it, and it said that she had to look for the videotape at Nightmare Hall. There was going to be a party there, so she could search it that night.
The night of the party, Shea visited every part of the house, and finally, she found the cassette inside a VCR and put it into her bag. After they left the party, Shea was very anxious and went to a room in the library to watch the videotape, but when she played it, she noticed that it was not her. “It’s me, I see you found it”, said Dinah. Shea was confused and Dinah explained her that she also took a copy of the exam and that she also wanted the videotape. She thought that Sid was the person who hurt Dr. Stark, but it wasn’t him, because after a few minutes they heard a voice, it was the whisperer! Shea went up to turn on the lights and when she did it, she discovered that the whisperer was Dr. Stark. Shea and Dinah were scared, because Dr. Stark started shouting and complaining about the students who cheat in the exams. She also explained them how she planned all this and how she could do what she did. Dr. Stark wanted to hurt Shea, but fortunately, the police arrived and took her to prison.
Things got back to normal, Dinah and Shea felt better, and they continued going out with her friends.
Comments on the ending:
In my opinion, this ending was perfect for this story, because at first I couldn’t imagine that the teacher would be the whisperer and it keeps you in suspense until the end of the story. I wouldn’t change this ending, because if I changed it, it would not have any sense and if I put another character as the whisperer, it would be obvious. But I would add something else, which can leave the reader in more suspense:
After taking the exam, Shea was feeling bad. She decided to tell Dr. Stark everything, so she went to her office to talk to her. When she arrived there, the door was opened, and Dr. Stark was on the floor, lying unconscious and bleeding. And the paperweight (where Shea left some blood spots) wasn’t there. Immediately, Shea called the emergency services but she didn’t give them her name. After a few minutes, some people arrived and took Mathilde Stark to the hospital. When Shea went to her room, she noticed that Tandy wasn´t there, and some seconds later, the telephone started ringing. It was the whisperer again, and he told her that he had taken the video and the paperweight. The whisperer also said that he would give her the video but she had to wait for a note in her mailbox.
For some days, Shea was impatient, and one day, there was a white notebook paper in her mailbox that was from the whispered. In the letter he said that he would meet her at the woods behind Nightmare Hall. Shea was scared, but she decided to go there. That night, she went at midnight to the place where the whisperer told her to be. She could hear his voice, but she couldn’t see him. He just explained what Shea had to do in order to get that videotape. It was a horrible thing what Shea had to do: she had to go to the lab where one of her friends worked, take a snake named Mariah, put it on a bag, take it to the room 620 and leave it inside the room!! Shea couldn’t imagine what was happening, but she had to do it if she wanted to get that videotape. So the next night she figured out the entire plan. But when she was leaving the building, she heard a scream coming from room 620 and everyone woke up. One of the girls who slept in that room, Bethany, had heart problems and had to be taken to the hospital. Shea helped there and then returned to her room. When she entered, the whisperer called her, but she was so mad that she hung up the phone. Some days later, Shea received a bag that contained something rectangular. She thought that it would be the videotape and when she opened it, she saw it. It was finally on her hands! That afternoon she went to see the video, but when she played it, she could only watch a Tom & Jerry cartoon. Shea couldn’t believe that. All what she had done for nothing?
Suddenly, she heard a voice, it was the whisperer. He was really mad and that was the reason of changing the videos. But he told Shea to do another thing so she could get the video, but this time it was a worse thing: she had to cut Tandy’s hair! She couldn’t do that. He told her that he had to go, but she had to do that in order to get the correct videotape. That night she went back to her room and saw Tandy sleeping.
Next day, Shea woke up and saw something strange: Tandy’s hair was on the floor. She didn’t know what to do, and when Tandy woke up, she screamed and then Dinah appeared. Tandy explained what had happened to her. Fortunately, Dinah could help her to have a nice hairstyle. That afternoon, while Shea was walking, someone took her neck with his hands, it was the whisperer, he told her that if she wanted the videotape, she had to look for it, and then he put something on her bag and left her. Shea looked into her bag and saw a cassette; she went to listen to it, and it said that she had to look for the videotape at Nightmare Hall. There was going to be a party there, so she could search it that night.
The night of the party, Shea visited every part of the house, and finally, she found the cassette inside a VCR and put it into her bag. After they left the party, Shea was very anxious and went to a room in the library to watch the videotape, but when she played it, she noticed that it was not her. “It’s me, I see you found it”, said Dinah. Shea was confused and Dinah explained her that she also took a copy of the exam and that she also wanted the videotape. She thought that Sid was the person who hurt Dr. Stark, but it wasn’t him, because after a few minutes they heard a voice, it was the whisperer! Shea went up to turn on the lights and when she did it, she discovered that the whisperer was Dr. Stark. Shea and Dinah were scared, because Dr. Stark started shouting and complaining about the students who cheat in the exams. She also explained them how she planned all this and how she could do what she did. Dr. Stark wanted to hurt Shea, but fortunately, the police arrived and took her to prison.
Things got back to normal, Dinah and Shea felt better, and they continued going out with her friends.
Comments on the ending:
In my opinion, this ending was perfect for this story, because at first I couldn’t imagine that the teacher would be the whisperer and it keeps you in suspense until the end of the story. I wouldn’t change this ending, because if I changed it, it would not have any sense and if I put another character as the whisperer, it would be obvious. But I would add something else, which can leave the reader in more suspense:
Things apparently got back to normal, Dinah and Shea felt better, and they continued going out with her friends. Their lives were ok, but one day, Shea entered her room and the telephone started ringing. The memories of the past situation that she lived came back to her mind. She started shouting and saying “No, please not again!”
Her friends went to see what was happening and tried to calm her down, but they couldn’t. She started trembling so they took her to the hospital. One night, Shea alone in a room, she heard a voice and then she saw Dr. Stark’s face, so she ran away but the doctors could stop her and said that Dr. Stark was in prison. That was the day when the doctors realized that Shea was out of her mind, and it was caused after the moment that she lived that horrible situation.
Shea was taken to a mental hospital; her friends visited her every day. Unfortunately, with the constant nightmares that she had, she decided to kill herself, but nobody knew how she died.
Her friends went to see what was happening and tried to calm her down, but they couldn’t. She started trembling so they took her to the hospital. One night, Shea alone in a room, she heard a voice and then she saw Dr. Stark’s face, so she ran away but the doctors could stop her and said that Dr. Stark was in prison. That was the day when the doctors realized that Shea was out of her mind, and it was caused after the moment that she lived that horrible situation.
Shea was taken to a mental hospital; her friends visited her every day. Unfortunately, with the constant nightmares that she had, she decided to kill herself, but nobody knew how she died.
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Interesting ending. I bet the story must have left you a message too.
Monica
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